Sunday, April 27, 2014

A Student's {Beautiful} Spoken Word- A Satire

Earlier in the year my students watched, studied, and then created their own spoken word poetry [some of you may recall my post about the poetry slam we did back in October]. The next month, we studied satire and the variety of ways it is implemented, as well as how it always has social commentary attached to it (unlike humor in general). My students were asked to create a satirical piece over any matter of their choosing and through any medium they wished. Emily decided to demonstrate satire through spoken word (and explanation), which had a very unique aspect, as most of her classmates went the political cartoon or short story route. I'm very proud of all this girl has accomplished this year-- writing is just one of her gifts. Enjoy her piece :)
Emily Helm Nov./Dec. 2014

“Diseased”
The doctor assesses
my limbs as the
lump in my throat
grows ever larger
the second hand
paces a beat
too slow as
the pain inside
of me waits for
a name
when he mutters the
words “you have cancer”
the room goes
silent the layer
of stillness only shattered
by the gasps of disapproval
the shards of truth
leaving no inch of humanity
in the room uncut
they say that
I should’ve “just tried harder”
to “just get better”
that I’ve brought shame
to my family
unworthy of forgiveness
the tears pool around
my eyes as
the blame for
my diagnosis weighs
heavily upon my
brittle bones
the tumor inside
me thrives off
this surge of
disappointment
as I try, I try
to stop it with
pure determination
for they say this
disease is
my fault that somewhere
somehow my mistakes
took shelter as
a dark mass inside me
filled with malice
and regret
its sorrow radiates into
my bloodstream
but when I try
to inject
happiness into
my veins through
plastered on smiles
and forged laughs
the cancer
only smirks
at my feeble
attempts to
subdue the
authority it holds
over my everyday life
because cancer
isn’t just a disease
it’s wall
a boundary that
boxes you away
from everyone else
and leaves you
alone to decay
without interruption
when my family sits
at the dinner table
and I just can’t
bite back my
sickness I find
myself alone
in this battle
with empty chairs
and plates still full
as my only companions
to march with into this
all out warfare
I’m expected
to hide this
embarrassment
for “normal people
don’t get cancer”
and the mark
this leaves
isn’t one of
honor so I live
day to day
as my family
tries to cover
up what they
see as their own
“personal failure”
a demonstration
of weakness and flaw
worthy of shame
they expect
me to slap
on a band-aid
that the
scars swollen
inside my hollowed
out body could
be fixed with
the words
“its get better”
that just being
“more positive”
would free me
from the shadows
passing through
my soul
but cancer doesn’t
take a vacation
it doesn’t part ways
with a sheer hope and
a changed mindset
cancer weaves through
your body as a
vine overgrown
with thorns strangling
any signs of vitality
from the inside out
the few flowers
that bloom under
this darkness sew petals beneath
layers of skin only
to be reached with
the blade of knife
its sharpness unveiling
the spring of
my youth
these memories
hidden by an
unbearable numbness
few flowers
endured
but when I
descended
into a terminal
winter the few petals
shriveled into dust
and as the snow
piles into my cracks
filling in the space
between my lungs
I lose myself into
walls of white noise
as my breathing subdues
into unsettled gasps   
the cold seeps into
my bones and the
cancer that supposedly
grew of out
my own faults
cracks my already
frozen heart
my family observes
an audience to
my decay
my last breaths break
their silence as I
whisper
I tried to get better
I did.


Explanation:
American society shuns mental disorders away from the public eye; they are often considered unacceptable to confess a diagnosis even with friends. Cancer, however, is treated with respect and eagerness to donate time and resources for the person’s affected needs. If an individual falls to cancer’s grasp, the community does not question the severity of the matter or undermine the effects both health-wise and the effects within the family dynamic. This poem does not exhibit much satirical humor; it is more a mixture of anger, bitterness, and sadness rolled into one, but if I was to categorize it I would put it under sarcasm (with use of invective language). I just wanted to provide commentary on this major social issue that affects many Americans and drives them to silence and isolation.

Wednesday, April 23, 2014

More Movie Treatment Magic

Hi, all! In continuation of the Modernism/Gatsby  movie treatment bragging, here is another fantastic one submitted by Azhar Hussain! Enjoy :)


Liberty, Justice and the American Dream for All
Investigative Documentary

Question: Americans all strive to achieve the highest attainable goal in society, the American Dream. To begin with nothing and to rise to the top of the economic/social ladder has a certain quality of respect that demands deference. Yet for most, the American Dream’s principles of egalitarianism and material prosperity will always remain a dream. Everyone can strive for it, but most will never reach its lofty rewards since wealth can only be judged by the poverty of others. That poverty is integral in a capitalistic system because the masses must be exploited for the benefit of the wealthy. But if there are no masses and everyone was the wealthy, it would tip the entire system on its head. What would change if every American lived the American Dream?

Treatment:

Constitution

The opening scene will begin by analyzing the US constitution from the beginning. It will show the newest addition to the age old document. The 28th amendment will state: All working Americans will be granted an annual federal salary of $1,000,000. America will try to change the American Dream’s fundamental meaning. Instead of giving Americans the opportunity to achieve economic success, they will mandate economic success, effectively granting every American the American Dream.

Presidential Briefing
Scene: Situation room with Joint Chiefs/ mood of excitement and willingness to act

The Joint Chiefs of Staff will be sitting in the situation room discussing the state of the American economy following the passage of the 28th amendment. America now has shouldered a significant burden. To give all 300 million Americans their federal salary, the government would have to shoulder a cost to the tune of 100 trillion US dollars. But the Secretary of Treasury is confident that it can be done. He explains that for Americans to all live the life of luxury and finally achieve the goals their forefathers strived so hard for, America would need to print more money… A lot more money. But printing more money would bring about hyperinflation, thus the US must takes steps to counteract these dire effects. To make sure America’s dollar stays the same value, the US would have to increase its gold stores to back up the currency. The current amount of $14 billion worth of gold will not be enough for this printing increase. The best way to acquire this gold, the Chief of Staff for the Military recommends that America start neocolonization practices in the western regions of Africa to commandeer the gold supply.

Nigeria - Gold mining town
Scene: Run down Nigerian mining town, hundreds of poor workers on screen toiling/ mood of utter depression and resignation to a sad fate. Convey feeling of hopelessness.

The movie will now show thousands of destitute and impoverished Nigerian citizens toiling in gold mines. They are overseen by uniformed US soldiers, in charge of ensuring unionization or collective strikes to not occur. All workers are forced to sign contracts agreeing that actions such as these are accepted as reasons for physical harm by the US Soldiers against the signee. Nigerians are trucked in from around the country to work in these contracted mines to ensure a steady supply of gold for the US. Paid meager salaries and forced off their traditional farms, they are dependent on US subsidized food for survival. American farmers ship excess food so the Nigerian people can continue to work as marginalized citizens in their own country to provide people the world over the ability to live in excess and comfort. The gold is drained from the country, “leaving a desert of exploited resources and citizens.”

Presidential Briefing
Scene: In the situation room with all the Joint Chiefs/ mood of uneasiness and loss of direction.

The Secretary of Treasury now realizes that there is not enough gold left in mines to meet the quota the US needs. Too much gold has been exploited for the past 3,000 years of history to leave enough in the ground to meet the United State’s ludacris demand. The Joint Chiefs begin discussing other methods of satisfying their golden wish. While the US has $14 billion worth of gold in their coffers, the United Kingdom’s Bank of London currently holds $260 billion worth of gold in their underground vaults. The Joint Chiefs try to justify the seizure of the UK’s gold. They reason that the UK ruled most of the world during the 1800s and thus exploited the planet unfairly. They hoarded the gold for themselves rather than returning the treasures. The US would be relieving the greedy central bank of London and give that gold to increase the living standard of each and every American, a much nobler cause. They finally decide what must be done.

Newscast
Scene: Breaking news broadcast story on TV

A newscast will be reporting the political strife of the past few months. The United States, determined to secure the gold for themselves has started strong-arming the UK on the international stage. First, they force the removal of the UK from the security council in the United Nations. Russia and China are happy to see a western democracy leave the ranks of security council, but due to the US’s threats of economic sanctions and the withdrawal from NATO, France and Germany also support the move, giving the US the unanimous vote it needs to evict the UK. Without the UK to block UN resolutions, the United States pushes forward in placing global sanctions on the UK for “human rights violations” and other falsified claims to cripple their economy. The UK is now forced to unload their gold supply to support its floundering economy, but doing so destabilizes the entire European Union by undercutting the price of gold that backs the Euro currency. With loud condemnation from the EU, the United Kingdom is forced out of the European Union. Without the EU’s mutual defense treaty, the US is now free to invade the UK. The newscast will end with the report that American troops have landed on the shores of the United Kingdom and forced rebellious residents into internment and re-education camps.

Status Report from the US Joint Kingdom Task Force
Scene: Commander sitting in operations tent alone, writing letter to the President.

The head of the US occupational forces writes a letter back to the President detailing the state of the war here in the UK. He explains that all gold has been secured and military bases neutralized. The only problem has been in suppressing the rebel groups. After the death of most revolutionary groups such as the IRA in the UK, most separatist and rebel activity had stopped in the 90s. But with the US occupation, it has served as a rallying cry to bring back the lifeless rebel groups. He explains that US troop casualties have been high, but high profile enemy leaders are being caught and executed almost daily. Civilian casualties have also been very high since most of the fighting has been occurring in urban settings such as London. Thus, citizens have been placed under martial law and many rebellious tendencies such as the right to protest and criticize the US have been revoked in order to maintain stability. He finally thanks the President for his time and reaffirms his commitment to ensuring the success of the American Dream and to provide the American people with the best life possible.

China - Communist Party Economic Briefing
Scene: Chinese political briefing/ progressive mood, willingness to change the country for the better.

While the US has seen an exponential increase in spending power for their citizens, China has witnessed massive growth in their manufacturing industry. This has allowed their own citizens spending power to skyrocket as well. Traditional chinese villages are now abuzz with the sound of cell phone rings and television sitcoms. Workers drive cars to their jobs and use the bicycle solely for recreation. The Communist Party decides that for China to be an able country that can support itself and not be tied to the demands of developed nations, it must move away from manufacturing and towards service sector jobs. They begin drafting resolutions to close down factories and expand funding for government run service jobs that rival the United States. Environmental regulation legislation is quickly passed as they attempt to alleviate the most pressing under developed problems that haunt the country. They decide these steps will be the best to advance China as a country.

Newscast

The newscast will explain the shocking surprise invasion of China by the United States. After months of new chinese economic policy and the shutting down of factories, supply of cheap manufactured goods in America began to dwindle. This caused widespread hysteria and lead to exponential increases in basic manufactured goods that Americans rely on. This undercut all the goals the US had been striving for because the price of goods was raising proportional to the higher salaries of the people, meaning people were no longer wealthy since they had to pay $40,000 for a washing machine. The US, now panicked that it would once again slide into the backwards era of wealth inequity, preemptively attacked China to topple the Communist regime and reestablish the manufacturing powerhouse.

US Occupational Forces  - Edict 3990

To ensure that China never again risked upsetting the balance of manufacturing to service sector jobs, the US will pass Edict 3990. The proclamation will make key regulations that must be met. By reopening the factories and appropriating funding for the expansion of the manufacturing sector, America reaffirms its commitment to making China the workshop of the world. To ensure the same forces don’t push workers out of the factories, the US institutes a salary cap on all Chinese workers. This will guarantee that no Chinese citizen makes enough money to buy the technological advances and material possessions that may lure him or her away from the factory. To ensure that these temptations did not exist, all technology requiring an electric motherboard were banned in China unless related to farming technology. China will now, and forever onward, be named the Chinese Republic of United Workers.

FInal Scene - Narrator Explanation

For every American to live the American Dream, nothing would change. The microcosm of America- of upper, middle, and lower class- would simply be expanded on a global scale. The US, UK, and China would simply become extrapolations of already existing social and economic stratas. For Americans to afford the life of luxury and leisure, it must be stolen from people across the globe. For capitalism to work, the bourgeoisie must exploit the masses, and in this case, America as a whole becomes the bourgeoisie. The negative connotation to the word shines through in this case, as American’s choose to blind themselves to the toils and strife of their fellow human beings in order to lead a “civilized” life. One can argue that the apathy the American society breeds towards the woes of its own race across the globe is the biggest manifestation of barbarism on the planet. These acts are already occurring, regardless of if every American is taking home a paycheck of $1 million, so when asked the question, “What would change for every American to live the American Dream?”

Absolutely Nothing.

Thursday, April 17, 2014

Student Brilliance - Movie Treatment

Technically, I started this blog as a means to demonstrate student work, to brag on/celebrate students, etc., but recently I noticed that the spoken word post was pretty much the only one that I really made my students a priority. Which is total crap because these awesome teenagers have turned in some incredible work throughout the year. I'm telling you. It's fantastic. But no one has really had the chance to marvel at these pieces because I haven't shared them. Talk about NOT coming in clutch...

So, in the spirit of redeeming my mistake, and in the even bigger spirit of passing along my 11th graders' GREATNESS, here's a quick summary of this particular assignment:

After learning about Modernism & reading The Great Gatsby, I asked my students to come up with an overarching question that was inspired from the novel. The question needed to be one that involved critical thinking, and then they needed to write an idea for a movie based off of that question. The question could be anything. It could be inspired by something that really irritated them about Fitzgerald's characters, it could be about the mindset of those in the 1920s in general, it could be a character expose, whatever. Honestly, the sky was the limit. The movie ideas could either explore the question proposed, or specifically answer it. They had freedom to create their own characters, infuse the characters from Gatsby, etc.

That being said, please enjoy this piece written by one of my precious students, Hannah Smith.



Hannah Smith
April 2014

Question to be explored:
Is the pursuit of happiness the most direct path to depression?

“The Best Days of Their Lives”
 

The city is unspecified, caught in an eternal sigh with slouched shoulders that once upon a time looked like skyscrapers but since have fallen from glory. Its streets lay covered with anonymous grime from hundreds of thousands of millions of anonymous soles of anonymous shoes of people who have names that nobody can remember.              

In one un-particularly shady back alley, our story begins. A deal is made, and the camera doesn’t show much more than shuffling legs and an exchange of hands, garbled voices in the background. There is exactly enough present for any attentive onlooker to get the idea, but in a city of such lonely crowds, nobody is going to call out against it. Two men and one woman are handed little bags, and one person walks away.              

The three who remain progress further down the alley, talking ad-lib about groceries. Here one may deduce that the individuals are roommates.                

After the end of the alley and a left-right-left-left, the trio buzzes into a brown door between a 7-11 and an old Mexican place that more than likely isn’t a restaurant so much as a front. The eyes of its patrons are always watching, always lit up with a certain paranoid gleam. They seem not to have noticed that nobody pays them any mind.              

Following the group leads to a dark apartment, with only a lamp in the far corner that still works. Even its bulb, however, is running dull. On the floor there are two mattresses and against the wall with the window there is a couch. Across each there are blankets and some pillows, different shades of tan and gray.              

The one with the red hair- his name is Raith- opens and shuts the refrigerator door, without glancing to see what’s inside. The camera will go close enough to show that nothing is, and the sense of habit from the action suggests that this is usually the case. Talk of groceries in the alley, it is now understood, is an empty habit just the same.              

Raith doesn’t stop walking until he reaches the stereo. Unlike all else in the building, it works as well as it did the first day out of the box. Theme music, he calls it, and Eleanor smiles at him, an inside joke; he smiles back. Aaron fails to notice. Had he noticed, perhaps other events of affection would have come together here, like the final degree in boiling water that a few degrees ago wouldn’t have meant anything. However, it is important to remember that he does not notice, and so Eleanor must love him still.              

Along these same sorts of oblivious lines, Aaron is the last to remember to unhide the bag in his back pocket. Eleanor and Raith stare at him, waiting, each reminding him of it being his idea in the first place. Holding himself to the most confident, slyest grin he can manage, Aaron bites his tongue to keep from reminding himself that he’d been joking.              

It’s pink, and ‘Be Mine’ is etched out on the front, like those candy hearts from class Valentine’s parties. Eleanor shows hers off, blue with a butterfly. Cute, she calls it. Raith presses play.              

An hour goes by and the first thing in which Aaron can see a difference is Eleanor’s hair. Reaching her waist, the color of cinnamon dust and the texture of the ocean, her hair has always been known to dance, but today he watches strands of ballet slippers tiptoe across it to the erratic beat of electronica and bass. The rest of his forever could have gone by like that, and he vowed that as much of it would as he could control. Eleanor and Raith talked, they danced, they sang and laughed, but Aaron only watched. Later he would be made fun of but for now he breathed in time to the dancers and waited for the sunrise to make them come alive for real.              

Whether it was that darkness stayed too long or sunrise came too late, Aaron never would really know. But he never sees the ballet slippers under the spectacular golds and reds and pinks he’d waited so patiently for; just the dimming lamp and what’s left of the moonlight through the crowded buildings and the open window. The dance dies down. Raith forgets to turn the music off.                               

Three days later, Raith, Aaron, and Eleanor take the pieces of good times out again: this time, Raith says, for real. There’s a guy he works with- do they remember Anthony?- who knows a place to go. The best place to go, somewhere the cops don’t know.              

Night comes, and together the three lock the door behind them and check to make sure their pockets don’t feel empty and don’t look full. Paranoia comes as a friend to the risk-takers.              

This time, Aaron finds a yellow circle in his hand, decorated with a dove. Like the one on the soap bars. It melts a little bit on his tongue and takes less time to make a difference. By the time it does, Eleanor’s dancing hair is lost in the background. Nobody else’s moves in just the same way.              

Aaron’s search for that opiate distracts him from reality, and that reality no longer looks the same. The lights, all thousand of them, all the hundreds of colors and flashes, are thick and blended so much that they would probably taste and feel the same as pudding.               

The people around him change, grow younger at the same time as they grow older, and the time isn’t Aaron’s. Maybe it’s ninety years before his. The dresses touch the floor, and people swing when they dance and everybody’s hair is cut nicely, on purpose. The music is, too. It lacks the accidental haphazard Aaron knows from Raith’s stereo. High heels and shined shoes and suits and nothing goes wrong. Hair doesn’t dance but nothing goes wrong.

Eleanor stays missing, but Aaron finds Violet with hair black like his, and her life together not like his. Braided and held up with pins, it doesn’t dance but her eyes swim. Bright green forest eyes and, in them, the trees swim. He doesn't love Violet but he loves her eyes. But,  Aaron comes down before the moon does once again, and Violet's eyes aren't so brilliant when the light falls naturally.

At seven in the morning Aaron trips his key through the eeky-creaky dead knob door. Eleanor and Raith don't move to wake up, sleeping on their mattresses but Eleanor is wearing  Raith's shirt. Separate mattresses, separately asleep, but once together, once awake? Or maybe the shirt belongs to Aaron, the initial confusion no more than a hysterical product of a mind tumbling down from euphoria.
_________

From seven in the morning onward, Aaron can only ever see Eleanor in Raith’s shirt, no matter what she really wears. But Violet never wears Raith’s shirt, she wears that dress with the mystery color that touches the floor for as long as the moon touches the sky, every other Friday night. Then every Friday night. Then more than that. The nights are full of Violet and Aaron hates the sun.

                Months go by and Aaron stops noticing. Faces fade and collapse on each other like the lights, and flashes of little circles, Be Mine’s, Butterflies, and Doves, pinks, blues, yellows, Raith’s damned stereo sometimes but Sinatra serenades most times as Aaron shifts his reality to 1924. He never travels back in time anymore, only forward, when the sun rises. He belongs in the world where the moon sets at night. Eleanor and Raith belong with sunrises.

_________
 
                On the last day before Aaron moves out, he remembers how Eleanor’s hair used to dance, the way it would call him like the ocean and ripple when she smiled, and how it was made of bronze- no, cinnamon. Once upon a time, her hair was made of cinnamon. He flashes back to the first time he saw it dance like that, and how he loved her then. It had had magic all on its own.

                Aaron waits for her to come through the door, watching the empty apartment with a clear mind for the first time in what feels like years. The dust covers the floor more than he remembers. Raith’s stereo doesn’t even work anymore, does it?

                Finally Eleanor’s footsteps fall through the doorway. Her hair falls only to her shoulders and the waves don’t fall at all, the cinnamon dust blown away. Aaron asks Eleanor why she cut her hair. Eleanor stares, and stares, and stares, and says nothing. He asks her why she cut her hair. She asks him how he got into the apartment when she and Raith took his keys away three Septembers ago.

                Now Aaron realizes how far he’s gone. Eleanor keeps staring. He loved her once.  Part of him wants to love her again. But he loves Violet and she loves Raith. She’s wearing his shirt. Before he walks out the door, that old, eeky-creaky door, Aaron chooses to act on this goodbye which he recognizes as forever. He tells her how he loved her. He tells her that he misses the way she smiled, but that she should smile like that for Raith forever because she loves him now.  When Aaron says Raith’s name, Eleanor throws the last working lamp at him and it shatters. 

_________

                Aaron finds himself soon with Violet, back in the color and life and craze of 1924, with the forest ocean in her eyes. He tells her that he loves her, and she laughs because she’s not real. She’s never said a word to him, she’s only ever laughed, but thanks to clever montaging and mixing of the 1920’s sequences, that only now becomes clear.

                Thus, in the same day, Aaron has lost both his loves and both his oceans, and he starts to fall out of place of any reality- his or otherwise. Violet’s charms don’t work quite so well now, and eventually her eyes turn gray, her laugh into indistinguishable city noise and Frank Sinatra suddenly sounds a lot like an electronic keyboard exploded, screeching pulsing semi-regularly in a million different hues of something that used to be pleasant.

                Aaron wanders around, and tries to forget. Mostly, he does, but sometimes, vague memories of a girl who’s name might be Allie slip in, and did he ever know a guy with red hair? Was the city always so monotonous like this? But he never forgets how beautiful an ocean looks when it’s made out of cinnamon dust, and every morning when he wakes up he can almost see it, the way a dream is when it’s on the tip of memory.

                Aaron stumbles, one day, upon a young man holding a tiny blue dove in his hand, and manages to remember just enough to know what it is. He needs it. Now. And he gets it, though his hands will never be the color of his skin again.
 
_________

            One last time, Aaron meets Violet. She laughs and disappears and Aaron can’t help but notice all the noise, and what is it about?

            The people around him are screaming and crying and nothing has a color besides black or white or gray, and where did all the brightness go? Surely, there still had been some when he left? Nineteen twenty-four doesn’t look like this.

            A stranger beside him grabs Aaron’s shoulder and shakes it, sobbing to himself, and Aaron can’t tell what he’s supposed to do. The man looks familiar, and maybe his name started with an R, but not familiar enough for other letters. At a loss, Aaron follows the direction of the gaze of the crowd, and realizes it points to nowhere.

            Newspapers are flying everywhere, and he picks one up. The date at the top reads October 29th, 1929. The headline announces a stock market crash.

 
(Credits)